This was very well written and other than grammatical errors (which have already been pointed out) I couldn't find much fault with it. I would have liked a bit more description but that's something I need to work on, too. This story really captured a child's innocence and the power of imagination. I loved the last line it was absolutely brilliant and you definitely have talent and a wonderful writing voice.
Turn your demons into art, your shadow into a friend, your fear into fuel, your failures into teachers, your weaknesses into reasons to keep fighting. Don’t waste your pain. Recycle your heart. — Andréa Balt
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