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My gun had skidded around the corner into Gruels yard, if I didn't hurry he would devour it whole.
"You won't get me this time!" my bro and I were having another fight, we got our guns this time and he has already shot me in the eye and back.
"You won't get me this time!"my bro(My brother) and I were having another fight,(Shouldn't this be two sentences?) we got our guns this time and hehas(had) already shot me in the eye and back.
"Your going to get tired sooner or later Jamie" I puffed
"Not on your life!"
My gun had skidded around the corner into Gruels (Dog or some supernatural animal? ) yard, (and) if I didn't hurry he would devour it whole. I run up and got my gun just as his tongue was lickingonit,
"Gru, I told you! No eating my weapons boy!" He sat down shyly and waved as I ran past.
Dave was coming up, gun aimed at my head. I got to a road block and hid behind it before firing a round in Dave's heart. He fell to the ground. I got up and sat on the road block waiting.
Finally Dave got up, "OKAYYYY (More appropriate to say, 'okay') Jamie, you win"I laughed a victorius laugh.(Say, "I laughed victoriously")
"Good game champ" I piped while shaking his hand.
"Yeah, next time lets use bombs. I want to blow you to pieces!"
"Haha too bad I can get myself back together before you can, your powers are haven't been so servicable lately"
"Aw Jamie, lay off would ya!" he nugded me and we bent to sit down when we heard a lady in the Mortal world scream.
We looked at each other for minute "Let's both go hmm Dave?" (I don't really understand this part, are they, like superheroes, saving the world or something?)
"Alright, butyour defeating(Should be "you defeat@) any villain that's up there, I just want to save the girl and kiss her!" (What girl? I thought it was a 'lady' scream)
I rolled my eyes "Okay, whatever, COME ON!" We flew off in the suction whole. (Suction whole? I think you must have meant 'Suction hole')
I whispered quietly to myself "Another chance to save a life, I'm excited."
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