I love that Isaac is her suitor, but I have a feeling that James is also one of them. Or maybe Isaac is lying? I don’t know…it is all very mysterious and I can’t wait to uncover more answers to these questions!
I actually found no mistakes or errors what so ever. But I must say that the dance between Isaac and Sophia was very quick. I was like, it’s over already? I would have liked to see them talk more. And why wasn’t Sophia happy that Isaac was her suitor? Or was she but just not showing it?
Sorry for all the useless questions but I just can’t help it…
Looking forward to more!
"Woe to the man whose heart has not learned while young to hope, to love—and to put his trust in life." ~ Joseph Conrad
"Music washes away from the soul the dust of everyday life." ~ Red Auerbach
Ashley-
Thanks! I'm actually writing the fourth chapter right now. {plus listening to DJ Tiesto!}
The whole James thing you'll have to see when the next chapters come up... And no, you questions weren't useless. So thanks again.
-Merry
you need to slowly down the dancing. it was too quickly for my taste, unless it was an upbeat dance.
I also have the feeling that James is a suitor. i am happy that the lord is one of her suitors, but i have a strangest feeling that he is lying some how, but if he was lying, how did he found out about the whole suitor thing?
I hope you post the four chapter soon.
PM me when you post it.
"I love you," she whispered in his ear, before taking his mouth with her own.
I think there should have been more conversations between Sophia and the lord guy. I think the dance ended too soon and nothing was said. Also, James, yeah, totally rooting for him.
haha!
Very well written dialog. I'm excited and I can't hold it in any longer, I must know more!!!
"Sometimes the worst bad guy makes the best good guy." Nigel--Untouched
jasmine12-
haha! You're review totally made me laugh!
I'll work on the conversations between Sophia and Issac. When I finally get the chance today. Otherwise, thanks again.
-Merry
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