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Sat Dec 08, 2018 3:31 pm
CloudAngel says...



I need critique for my two original stories here, A Young Orphan Girl and A Swedish Surviving Family and I have issues with inspiration and coming up with titles and with smooth sentences too and how to get smooth sentences since it is a problem for me.
  








In a hole in the ground there lived a hobbit. Not a nasty, dirty, wet hole, filled with the ends of worms and an oozy smell, nor yet a dry, bare, sandy hole with nothing in it to sit down on or to eat: it was a hobbit-hole, and that means comfort.
— JRR Tolkien