love hina encore
chapter 1:
scene 1: hinata apartments
shinobu is asleep in her bed
kaolla opens the door
kaolla : shinobu what are you doing , you shouldn't sleep during the day
shinobu slowly opens her eyes and sits up
shinobu : what time is it ?
kaolla : its all most noon
shinobu : is it that late... why did you guys let me sleep in this long?
motoko : you want to be fully rested for the festival tonight don't you?
shinobu : festival? what festival?
kaolla : the star festival silly, you got to be fully rested in case you meet a nice boy
shinobu : don't joke about a thing like that, it's not funny (blush)
keitaro shouts from down stairs
keitaro : shnobu could you come here please
shinobu : OK ill be down in a minute
kaolla : perhaps you'll find someone a cute as ketaro
shinobu blushed a deep red
shinobu : GET OUT!
shinobu throws her pillow at kahola
door closes
down in the main lobby
shinobu : what is it ketaro?
keitaro : me and naru were going out ,we were wondering if there was anything you needed picked up
shinobu : no there nothing i need , you two go and enjoy your time out
naru : OK shinobu , see you later
as naru and ketaro were walking out the door all shinobu could look at was the ring on naru's finger
kitsune :20 years old and shes already engaged
shinobu : hes only 2 years older then her so it's not that bad
kitsune : shinobu, i know you liked him but he to old for you
Motoko: 7 years in the difference IS a little much
kitsune : you fell in love with him as well so don't act like you never
shinobu: maby you should have confessed your love, only being one year younger then him , you two would have made a nice couple
Motoko : can we please stop fighting your giving me a headache
ok so it got me thinking why not make it better ... so i tryed...
mostly paragraph 2 is the one change...completly
may i present love hina 1.2 ... it's a work in progress. but it's started
if you see any probloms let me know and i will try to fix them again
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