I think the grammatical things have all been covered so I won't go over that again. But I will say that I enjoyed the story, I always love a good zombie tale. I liked the subtle differences to usual zombie stories you added in there like them being slower to attack and knowing that it knew he was even in there in the first place. You left me wanting to know more, although I don't predict much of a future for the protagonist after that bite. Has everything its needs, well done.
"The bird that would soar above the level plain of tradition and prejudice must have strong wings. It is a sad spectacle to see the weaklings bruised, exhausted, fluttering back to earth." — Kate Chopin, The Awakening
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