Young Writers Society

[i]Half this age,
I was captivated by the simplest of things,
with only monsters under the bed to fear.
Double this age,
I suspect life will just pass me by,
and I will fear life itself.

But now, I'm 16 and realising,
even the prettiest of flowers,
have thorns on guard.
People preach the ideal,
but rarely act promisingly.
I'm 16 and realising,
society sticks to rigid and time honoured codes,
failing to break tradition for the greater good.
The truth is constantly manipulated,
leaving trust merely a vunerable element of our hearts.
I'm 16 and realising,
It's the stories of one's life from the beginning,
that dictate every part of them.
Love is over-rated,
an idea that saddens those who can not find it.
I'm 16 and realising,
that it takes ignorance to complete happiness,
and denial to claim peace.
What is seen is not what always exists,
and it is this bitterness that channels the truth.

I suppose we can be excused;
it is impossible to reach perfection,
let alone mantain it.[
Racism is endemic;
People lie and cheat;
This world is no heaven;
Society is purely a cycle that traps what we want to loose most;
Smiles only appear to every hundred tears,
and life hardens a soul to the very core.

I'm 16 and realising,
most things appear a diamond from a distance,
but are a tear-drop up close...[i]

Omg this is REALLY good!!! I admire almost everything about it!!! The beginning is really catchy and the ending is absolutely amazing! Great job on this magnificent piece!
I honestly don't really have anything bad to say about this. I read it a few times and didn't quite pick out any flaws, so good work!

I'm 16 and realising,
most things appear a diamond from a distance,
but are a tear-drop up close...

Love LOVE [i]LOOVE this!!! Really hope to check out more of your works later on.

Hey i am Steven and i also do love the work you have done on this piece. The themes are nailed which is one of the hardest skills in writing, something i find hard to achieve myself on a regular basis. Although the poem is great and i have a lot of admiration for it i believe you can do even better so contact me with more of your work in the future please. I look forward to reading it. I think you have the ability to bring more emotion to the poem and with a little time this will happen
Keep WRITING!

This is a really nice piece, and a lot of it is true, but don't grow up to fast. Being 16 is a time to have fun, yes think about your future, you only have 2 years before it slams into you. Believe me, I wish I prepared more when I was 16, but I'm 18 now and the world is a scary place. You just learn to make the best out of it, make mistakes, learn from them, do the best you can. Don't wait until last minute to get your stuff together..but don't forget to have fun somewhere in there or else you're going to be all work and no play.

I didn't understand this at first but i started listening to drake while reading this and it's been helping with the trickier pieces. this is really cool. i mean i'm seeing these poems and it's like i want you to continue on with it cuz put it to a beat and it would be hecka amazing. i love the theme of sorta a loss of innocence type thing where you stop seein the world so pretty. It's incredibly relatable. I mean i'm still just a big kid hahaha but you know we learn so much in those years and it gives us experience and just to be able to go back to that sort of innocence would be so cool and a real gift.