Young Writers Society

Through the years I've waited. Thinking it would happen when it was meant to.
I had always considered myself patient, but then I met you.

At first you seemed like every other guy, cute yes, but that was all.
Then one day, your eyes caught mine. When you smiled I started to fall.

Then every time I saw you, that feeling did nothing but grow.
But I also felt silly, and foolish and I refused to tell you so.

Instead I kept silent, and confided only to my friends.
In the mean time, I didn't realize my hopes were coming to an end.

Now you care for someone else and I have only myself to blame.
I like to think my silence was smart, for I doubt you would have felt the same.

So here I am still waiting for love, but now I'm not sure of what to do.
Now the waiting is different, and it's all because of you.

I thought this was a really great poem. Your rhymes were consistently good. I thought the story was very relatable and I could connect to the message. Thanks for sharing!

In a way this is quite a simple poem, but as others have said, quite true and relatable to many people. I liked it because it had a distinct sense of truth to it, and the entire thing flowed quite well. There's only one thing I want to point out:

Now the waiting is different, and it's all because if you.

That should be because of you. But I'm pretty sure that's just a typing error, and other than for that everything seems to flow pretty well.

Keep writing,

~MorningMist~

Simple. There was nothing overwhelmingly profound about the poem, but perhaps it is the simplicity that makes it so. The thing I liked was how true this was. It was so easily read, and everyone could understand it. Sure, it's not flowery, the vocabulary is normal, but I think that's what I like about this. I just wish you would elaborate the emotions instead of just saying them so blankly, but that's the thing about these things; just do whatever

Thanks guys, I haven't been able to log on here in ages, so I haven't written in a long time either.. (Laptop died a few months back.) I'm glad ya'll liked it!