Young Writers Society

This is rather awkward for me. I've never posted on this board or asked for contructive critism on a poem. Well, here goes nothing.

He stands at your side
Your hand entwined with his
I think of the days when he was in my reach
I look to you
Beaming in his presence
To interfere would have cost too much

I stand at your side
Playfully punching him
He laughs
I laugh
You laugh along
We are content
This costs nothing

very good! i loved this! I CANT EVEN COME UP WITH ANY COMMENTS OR SUGGESTIONS! way wicked! case CLOSED.

Beautiful. Absolutely amazing. Now, if only I could feel so content with my friends' relationships..

I loved it too. It seems to end a bit abruptly IMHO, but it is definitely effective like that. Nice concept here. I look forward to seeing some more of your work around, SilverWright.

i like this. perhaps a bit too simple, but you have a good concept and it was well-written.

I love it - I can relate to that poem yet I find it hard to be content.
Its an amazing peom you should be very proud of it
Wouldn't change anything !!