Young Writers Society

A "J" for "Joy", sweet peppermint bliss,
My favorite part of the holiday times.
Up and down the thin red stripes, a kiss
Of that unsatisfied craving of mine.

I love short, simple poetry about random things and I love those little peppermints

My favorite part of the holiday times.

really?
This is a sweet poem - ha-ha-ha-ha - but I honestly don't get the relevance of the title.
It just doesn't make sense to me. I can't figure it out.

A "J" for "Joy", sweet peppermint bliss,

It's clever, though, to include that line in the poem as well. I guess that was the topic, or phrase that you were studying or working around.

Cool rhyming structure xD!!!
Emmzziee

Hmm...I'll have to edit this. It was supposed to be about candy canes.

Hi, this is "A" for Al, giving a Quick Critique!

Concept & Theme:
I just don't understand it but, even though your poem is quite cut short, it gives this sort of satisfactory feeling which comforts me and tells my mind that "yeah, I completely understand this poem!" even though I didn't much. Is it maybe because you secretly put magic spells in this here pieces. Or maybe because you just made a piece with such great appeal! I simply love it! I still didn't quite get the theme though...

Content:
I like the colorful usage of words. There are sweet, cold, simple and more variations of words present in these short verses. I'm also quite happy to tell you that I liked the poem even though it didn't bring much verses because of the impact of the words. Creative!

Technicalities
I'd rather not give any comment or a Smile-o-meter here. It seems to short to notice any mistake!

Overall:
Although it didn't exactly appeal to me as a literary word, it bewitched me in its charms. The wonderful usage of words simply made me fall in love. The only thing I can say is that, your poem, although cut short and quite confusing, brought me a feeling called joy.

You're on there, so good luck!
Al

Short, sweet, and to the point. I love peppermint and I completly agree with what you have said. Stay sweet.

Rarity ♦