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It's Christmas! (WARNING: pointless swearing and sarcasm)



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Sat Dec 24, 2011 11:10 am
MasterGrieves says...



I need coffee;
the city is tight.
It's a Christmas party
and the night is right.
I wish to sacrifice
my days and my nights
to get it all perfect-
to get it all right.

This party sure is a blowout alright.
Yeah, blowout your ass.

It just won't help,
the schedule is thick.
It may be Christmas
but it all must stick.
I want to give away
everything so quick,
so when the day's over
I will not feel sick.

This party sure is a blowout alright.
Yeah, blowout your ass.

Anal waste;
this is the "food" now:
Undercooked and so raw
yet I can't go back in town.
That dress is repulsive,
no blackberry now.
You have to pay the price,
so sit down you cow.

This party sure is a blowout alright.
Yeah, blowout your ass.

Notice the sarcasm
like some sort of backspasm,
And don’t get your hopes up
before it all fucks up.
So set up the sodding tree
for another year of cynical glee,
and Christmas is so hyped
yet it's still one day you shite.

This party sure is a blowout alright.
Yeah, blowout your ass.
The Nation of Ulysses Must Prevail!

If you don't like Mikko, you better friggin' die.

The power of Robert Smith compels you!

Adam + Lisa ♥


When you greet a stranger look at his shoes.
Keep your money in your shoes.


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Wed Dec 28, 2011 8:42 pm
GeeLyria says...



Hi Adam!

This is somehow funny. Your wording is neat and it flows nicely.

Keep on working, it was great! :D

Loff you,
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Thu Dec 29, 2011 12:45 pm
JCK says...



Okay.

This is odd.

I'm shocked and yet I still enjoyed the reading. But still... what?

It's good and the rhymes aren't too predictable, I like it. But I can't really say anything else since... it's odd.

And vulgar.

And odd.
The most wondrous sight I've ever seen is the sight of the sun in the sky.We are some of the lucky few who are allowed to exist; does that not make it all worth it?

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