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Sat Jan 21, 2012 5:14 pm
NoraOHara says...



What is 13?

a number
a curse
a girl

A female
a person
an aqiantance

a friend
a best friend
a love

not lonely like 1
not lucky like 7
but a little odd like 5

shes curious
but vial
shes optimistic
but tempting
shes beautiful

shes my 13
my unlikely favorite
  





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tgirly says...



You spelled aquaintance wrong, and I'm not completely sure I spelled it right, so you'll have to check that. I like the first part, but I'm not sure you pull it all together at the end. Good job though, I always liked short-lined poems and you have a nice rhythm.Hope this helps!
When I was young, I admired clever people. Now that I am old, I admire kind people.
-Abraham Joshua Heschel
  








This planet has - or rather had - a problem, which was this: most of the people living on it were unhappy for pretty much all of the time. Many solutions were suggested for this problem, but most of these were largely concerned with the movement of small green pieces of paper, which was odd because on the whole it wasn't the small green pieces of paper that were unhappy.
— Douglas Adams, The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy