Hello Hello I know you might not see this but I wanted to give some older works a shot, Overall this is a very smooth piece with a few typos that are present not breaking it. In fact, I didn't notice the typos at first, don't worry others have brought it up so I won't beat an old dead horse.
I also like the harsh imagery and dark plot paired with a soft almost unbothered flow. Personally, I feel this could play into the overall theme and historical context of the poem. it reminds me of the lullaby version of a japanse song ( I cant remember the name of it right now. To me, I see this poem as dealing with the horrors of early imperialistic Japan and its heavy military force. As I am neither from the culture nor a historian I do not want to get too deep into this.
Wherever you are I hope you are doing well. If you ever see this I wish you luck, Keep writing and drink water!
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